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A New Story: Ganny and Me - A Gay Love Story

JoshPrim Blog Last Activity 7 years ago 487 views 10 comments

Here's my latest story and the first romance that I've written.  It's about an 18 yo boy who receives a high school graduation present to go to Paris so he can go to the famous art museums in that city.  When he gets there he meets a rather unusual Greek boy and they fall in love.  I'm rather proud of it and I hope you'll like it.  This story has been entered into Literotica's Valentine's Day contest and I hope you'll vote for it.  Here's the link:  https://www.literotica.com/s/ganny-and-me-a-gay-love-story.  Also please comment here and on Literotica what you liked about it.  Thanks, Josh Prim.  p.s. The basic premise of this story is taken from a 1940's movie and musical - top marks to anyone who message me as to what that show is.

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JoshPrim
7 years ago

This contest is still going on - for the next 3 days, so I'd appreciate it, if you like gay porn fiction, for you to read it and give me 5 stars.  The scoring only goes up to 5.00 and my current score is only 4.52 because of some jackasses who only gave me 1's (definitely undeserved).  Any help you can give me will be appreciated.  If you post comments about the story here, I'll add you to "My Twink of Day" Wall postings. Thanks!!!

7 years ago

This was great. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your last story seemed a bit dry and mechanical to my own personal taste, although it was well put together. But this new one was much more to my liking and the characters much better realised as personable people. First of all, everything was well written and constructed. On top of that, it was full of imagination, whimsy, humour and some poetry. The story is actually very romantic in a delightfully playful manner, totally appropriate for a Valentine's Day contest. The interactions between Ethan and Ganny are charming. I liked the way you convincingly set up Ethan to begin with, capturing the kind of person he was and his excitement about his new adventure. When Ganny appeared I felt a genuine surprise and smiled. Well now THAT's interesting, I thought. You did a good job sustaining the whimsy of Ganny coming to life, with regular, inventive details that maintained it (such as the two different connotations of 'cloud' to Ethan and Ganny). In fact, what made this story work so well to me was that you put in a lot of contextual, incidental, random, unexpected detail, the kind of things that gave it reality and life-like-ness. Perhaps the only criticism I would have - again in the spirit of giving you constructive feedback and it really is just this one thing - is that given the imagination and invention in the story, the sex scenes themselves seem a bit dry and mechanical by comparison. If they had even just a few more interesting, descriptive, inventive details in them they would seem more part and parcel of the rest of it. That might simply be my own taste, so it's just a suggestion. Basically, good work. I enjoyed reading it. It also comes across how much you enjoyed writing it and some of that pleasure and playfuness you had writing it communicates itself through the story with a kind of joie de vivre. So five stars from me.

Davey1965
7 years ago

Thanks Josh I'll write u when I read it

7 years ago

Have this bookmarked to read on the weekend with some other stuff.

JoshPrim
7 years ago

Thanks to all that have read it and commented.  I appreciate it!


 

voyeur327
7 years ago

Keep writing, there seems to be a natural talent there--good story! (I'm old and senile, haven't a clue about the movie!)

7 years ago

Sweet story...5 stars